Jasmine Hart

Hey Kylan, As usual, this flows perfectly and your imagery is great. I especially enjoyed: "a conchology in which i press my ear less to the tide's zonophone, the dragging ...

Hi, The rhyme works well here and it develops nicely and flows well as a whole. I especially enjoyed; "The dull sense of hope is crushed when he breaks you". ...

Aw this is adorable. :)

I would like to join and invent a character if it suits you. Want to get back to storybooking. I would like to be with the poets if that's ok.

Hi, This flows nicely. I'd avoid the archaisms by changing "afire" to "on fire " and "has not to do" to "has naught to do." I'd also cut the commas ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. Your imagery is great, I could really feel this. It flows very nicely. I especially enjoyed: "my fingers mindlessly tugging at the grass ... I ...

Hi Lumi, The opening lines instantly drew me in. I love "tangled up in her eyelashes." I loved the description in stanza two, and stanza three is great. I'd take ...

Hi, This is really lovely. I love the combinations of words and the alliteration, and it flows very nicely. I love the arrangement of "dark" and "warm." I'd change "whispering ...

Hi, Love poems are very difficult to write as it is the most common theme for poetry, and I think you handle it well. The opening lines instantly drew me ...

Hi, The title and opening lines really drew me in. You maintain a great comic tone throughout, and I enjoyed this very much. The ending worked very well. I'd avoid ...

Hi, I love the direct address to the reader in the first stanza and the opening lines of stanza two. The tone works very well overall. I'd change "You'll sin ...

Hi, I love your use of onomotopoeia here. It really drew me in, and the repetition of sounds builds tension. "Mother said it wouldn't happen" is ominous and the mention ...

Banned because I think her avatar is an octagon but can't be sure.

Hi, This is lovely. The first couplet instantly drew me in and the poem flows well as a whole. I love the isolation of "alone" on the final line. I ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. It flows nicely and you use language and imagery well. I especially enjoyed: "and cut perfect, smiling gingerbread people " and "with a cup of ...